Combine each group of short, choppy sentences into one sentence.
1. Chihuahua is divided into two regions. It is the largest Mexican state. One region is a mountainous area in the west. The other region is a desert basin in the north and east.
Chihuahua, which is the largest Mexican state is divided into two regions which is a mountainous area in the west and desert basin in the north and east.
2. Disney World covers a large area of land. It is an amusement park. It is located in Orlando, Florida. The land includes lakes, golf courses, campsites, hotels, and a wildlife preserve.
Disney World, which is an amusement park in Orlando, Florida covers a large area of land that includes lakes, golf courses, campsites, hotels, and a wildlife preserve.
3. Jamaica is one of the world's leading producers of bauxite. It is the third largest island in the Caribbean Sea. Bauxite is an ore. Aluminum is made from this ore.
Jemaica, which is the third largest island in the Caribbean Sea is one of the world's leading producers of bauxite, which is an ore, which aluminum is made from.
4. Robert Ballard made headings in 1985. He is an oceanographer. In 1985 he discovered the remains of the Titanic. The Titanic was the "unsinkable" passenger ship. It has rested on the floor of the Atlantic Ocean since 1912. It struck an iceberg in 1912.
In 1985, Robert Ballard, who is an oceanographer, discovered the remains of the Titanic, which was the "unsinkable" passenger ship, which has rested on the floor of the Atlantic Ocean since 1912 and struck an iceberg in 1912.
5. William Shakespeares's father was a glove maker and a town official. William Shakespear's father was John Shakespeare. He owneda shop in Stratford-unon-Avon. Strafford-upon-Avon is a town. It is about 75 miles northwest of London.
William Shakespeares's father, who was John Shakespeare was a glove maker and a town official and he owned a shop in Straford-upon-Avon, which is a town and about 75 miles northwest of London.
6. The Republic of Yemen is an ancient land. It is located at the southwestern tip of the Arabian Peninsula. This land has been host of many prosperous civilizations. These civilizations include the Kingdom of Sheba and various Islamic empires.
The Republic of Yemen, which is located at the southwestern tip of the Arabian Peninsula is an ancient land which has been host of many properous civilizations which include the Kingdom of Sheba and various Islamic empires.

1 Comments:
Your grade is C. Be careful of the commas.
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